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Let me try to tell you something

(one two three four five)

I try to be the best I can.

(one two three four five)

I try and try to tell you something,

But I can't.

Why are you so adamant?


(one two three four five)
(one two three four five)


Tears are falling, salty flavor.

(one two three four five)

This is an inheritance.

(one two three four five)

I cannot rebuke this behavior

Remind me why

Why I'm such a failure?


(one two three four five)
(one two three four five)
(one two three four five)
(one two three four five)


Let me try to tell you something.

(one two three four five)

This is just the way I am.

(one two three four five)

If I can't go on then will you

Will you try?

Try to do your best for me?

(one two three four five)

I really want to tell you something.

(one two three four five)

So much that it's hurts inside.

(one two three four five)

I really want to tell you something

It's a lie

I guess that I'm not worth your time.


(one two three four five)

(one two three four five)

(one two three four five)

(one two three four five)


Jump.
©2008-2009 ~Tachan17
:icontachan17:

Author's Comments

This actually has music that goes with it.

This is about suicide.
The person is trying to jump off of something,
But is held back by the memory
Of someone who doesn't even care about them.

Funny.

Ever heard the song 'You Make Me Want to be a Man"?

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:iconlevviathor:
It's sad...

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Spiritus Gladius
:iconeekerknockers:
Before I got to the end where it says 'jump', I thought of when you're nearing hysteria and you're edging between frustration, numbness, or just plain anger-but then you start counting. And believe me, you can count forever.

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:'D
:icontachan17:
Yeah, I know.
^^'
This is my crappy mood swing.
Ahahahaha! ...

Thanks for the favorite!

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A tantalizing possibility, Neku.
:iconeekerknockers:
:'D
Aren't mood swings the best?

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:'D
:icontachan17:
lol inorite?

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A tantalizing possibility, Neku.
:iconskratchbomb:
Oh my goodness! That's so pretty! hmm...I've notced that in like every thing you say that you want to say something to the person you're writing to. Why don't you? If it hurts so much then you should say it. And if it's a lie then say that it's a lie before you say it. :0...pretty pretty...*sighs*

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Flaming Uke Your flamboyant gayness makes it easy for seme to prey on you and thats what you want. Colored hair, designer clothes. Your eyes search for the perfect partner. Best paired with Chibi Seme who rises to the challenge with their mischievousness.
:icontachan17:
Wait, I don't know what you mean.

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A tantalizing possibility, Neku.
:icontachan17:
Wait, I don't know what you mean.

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A tantalizing possibility, Neku.
:iconskratchbomb:
Well like in almost all the poems that you write, there's something saying that you want to say or do but it's not true or something like that. If you want to say something to someone then just say it. And if you think it's a lie then tell them that before you tell them what you want to say. Idk...I've noticed that the theme repeats itself. And you should trust more in what you think because if...oh I really don't know what I'm talking about now.

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Flaming Uke Your flamboyant gayness makes it easy for seme to prey on you and thats what you want. Colored hair, designer clothes. Your eyes search for the perfect partner. Best paired with Chibi Seme who rises to the challenge with their mischievousness.

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